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Post  Peace Kwest on Fri Aug 05, 2016 9:27 pm

Being reworked
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Re: My OC bio!

Post  zerowing21 on Fri Aug 05, 2016 9:41 pm

Ethnicity would be what the character is normally.

Origin would be cyborg.

How is taking a beating a strength? Can you expand on that?

You need to add more to the personality I think. A few more negative traits.

You need to start from well the start, like where he was born etc.

The history isn't that long, but you have to expand the history a bit. Having his arm replaced after losing one, does not make him a cyborg. To be one, he has to have lot more than just one arm as a machine. We really do not have safe zones set up per say either, aside form the cul-de-sac which is fusion free due to reasons.
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Re: My OC bio!

Post  Peace Kwest on Sat Aug 06, 2016 4:36 pm

zerowing21 wrote:Ethnicity would be what the character is normally.

Origin would be cyborg.

How is taking a beating a strength? Can you expand on that?

You need to add more to the personality I think. A few more negative traits.

You need to start from well the start, like where he was born etc.

The history isn't that long, but you have to expand the history a bit. Having his arm replaced after losing one, does not make him a cyborg. To be one, he has to have lot more than just one arm as a machine. We really do not have safe zones set up per say either, aside form the cul-de-sac which is fusion free due to reasons.
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Re: My OC bio!

Post  Kyra_Xyrespace on Mon Aug 08, 2016 11:15 pm

Peace Kwest wrote:Powers: ..........
Advance in hand-to-hand combat
Good at medium to heavy lifting
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After his battle with the fusion his brain cells were damaged and got replaced with technology replacement that expanded his vision and reflexes, most of cyborg improvement are inside his head, so the cyborg arm is the only machinery that outside his body..

Not necessary in this section. They belong in the strength section, personality section, and/or history section.

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Re: My OC bio!

Post  Professor Utonium on Mon Aug 08, 2016 11:50 pm

I'd suggest checking out the Timeline in the Required Readings section, since the way events fall in your history confused me.

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Re: My OC bio!

Post  Peace Kwest on Thu Aug 25, 2016 6:11 pm

^ Done + Thanks

Sorry for dragging this :/
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Re: My OC bio!

Post  Mr.Didathing on Mon Aug 29, 2016 3:38 am

I'll approve because why not.
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Re: My OC bio!

Post  zerowing21 on Mon Aug 29, 2016 10:20 am

You've ignored what kyra said, might want to check on that.
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