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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 2:45 pm

Depends on how he was crush by the 1 ton of stuff. If its full crushing, then I'll say no way he can recover from that. Too op. If it's part of him, like the lower half, then its gonna take a long time for him to recover.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 2:55 pm

So I changed it to say crushed from the chest down. Meaning if my head is destroyed, I'm dead. If I'm crushed lower than that I'll need a lot of time to heal, 8 days is just a happy average for all those things I mentioned.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 2:58 pm

8 days for that type of injury just seems too fast for the rp. I would say at least a month for it. 8 days feels a bit too op if you catch what I mean.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 3:03 pm

Alright, I changed it to a changeable time frame. What do you think of this one. As an example 10 days would be something being stabbed in specific blood vessels. While 35 days would be being stabbed in the heart. (I'm willing to extend the heart on, seeing as 35 days still seems short for that.)
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 3:05 pm

being stabbed in the heart with 35 day healing time might be a bit long, but I can work with that.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 3:23 pm

Sooooooo, anything else?
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 3:38 pm

I have one issue with the history, Why didn't the KND first send the character to Providence to ascertain what his powers were or what not. They are the ones with the best researcher into nanites and what not. And after he could be sent to Dexlabs for whatever reason, for more training etc.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 4:01 pm

I changed it to say that he just doesn't trust Providence. As for reason for that I'd say he was just afraid of what could be happening there, so he chose DexLabs over Providence. While in the present he's more trusting of them, after working with Rex.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 4:07 pm

Well that's a believable reason.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 4:17 pm

Are there any other issues or things you need to go over?
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 5:19 pm

I'm looking over the broken bone stuff for the healing factor. Depending on the bone, it should take way longer. it takes a full month for a normal break to heal depending on how bad so I would say a week to two weeks depending on how bad it is. I do however wish for kyra to have a say on the matter as well when she is able to do so.

Also when Rex cures someone, its not because of complying, his nanites just can't overide the current nanites or something along those lines. nanites aren't able to really tell if anyone is a threat (aside the omega nanites), since they are just simple small machines so that part of them attacking Rex isn't believable. So could you change it to him being upset and pushing rex back with smoke or something?
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 6:29 pm

I fixed the part about how the nanites activated. And I was wondering, where should I put explanations my weapons and any other special equipment?
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 6:36 pm

well it's optional, but you can put an etc section at the end to do so.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 7:02 pm

I added the extra details. And I'm not sure if the pistols are op or not, if there's anything that needs changing with that. But besides that I've got nothing else, so I'll just wait for Kyra.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 7:12 pm

Yeah those pistols are OP and probably shouldn't be allowed.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 7:20 pm

And just like that, it's reworked to be less op.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 7:27 pm

I'd think it would be better if one gun used fire and the other ice only. Having it three in one just seem too much for one gun.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 7:33 pm

So, I changed it to your idea. And, being completely honest, that was an amazing idea that I wish I thought of.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 10:53 am

So the bag is a hammer space bag? How did it get developed? Cuz we have few items like that in universe, the only other one is Amp's coat.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 11:12 am

Well, it's not actually a hammer space bag, because that means he could take anything out of it. The backpack only fits things that would fit in a backpack, it just makes it lighter. Also, it's an enchant from Gwen, I said that said the history section.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 1:18 pm

Alright. sorry for being such a pain on the character.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 1:56 pm

What do you mean? If anything you helped me think about my character, And how to turn him into a person, instead of a glorified gary stue.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 2:51 pm

well I mean with mainly the backpack thing. As far as I can tell, this character is in good order enough to pass, I'll give it a tentative approval for now.
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Post  GoldenBladeX100 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 2:57 pm

In that case, I shall give you an ecstatic thanks.

Thank you! For the help and approval! (ノ´ヮ´)ノ*:・゚✧
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Sep 25, 2016 3:02 pm

No problem. While I would like kyra to give a look over your character, when she can, you're good to go to join the rp with the two approvals.
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