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Post  zerowing21 on Fri Sep 29, 2017 11:36 pm

Didn't realize you had done the correction so my bad (Nor was there any kind of notification that a correction had been done). Can you please edit the history so its not a run on sentence and everything that is supposed to be a thought is separate and complete? Just makes it easier to understand.


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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Fri Sep 29, 2017 11:38 pm

zerowing21 wrote:Didn't realize you had done the correction so my bad. Can you please edit the history so its not a run on sentence and everything is a complete thought? Just makes it easier to understand.
which part
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Post  zerowing21 on Fri Sep 29, 2017 11:40 pm

The entire history. Like each thought is a sentence. Even thought the thing with the KND and the Operation C.A.K.E and what not, those would be several sentences. It just helps with over all structure.
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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Fri Sep 29, 2017 11:47 pm

zerowing21 wrote:The entire history. Like each thought is a sentence. Even thought the thing with the KND and the Operation C.A.K.E and what not, those would be several sentences. It just helps with over all structure.
you mean start from sratch
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Post  zerowing21 on Fri Sep 29, 2017 11:53 pm

No, not at all. It's easy to edit to make everything complete sentences. I'll give you a minor example

His childhood was good and he actually he had a good relationship with his family. His actually kept good grades, He joined the knd when he was spying on them. During his recruitment, they noted his sword skills and how good with a blaster he was.

See? Simple edits and changes, but nothing changed. It helps complete thoughts and not make it one giant sentence.
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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Sat Sep 30, 2017 12:03 am

zerowing21 wrote:No, not at all. It's easy to edit to make everything complete sentences. I'll give you a minor example

His childhood was good and he actually he had a good relationship with his family. His actually kept good grades, He joined the knd when he was spying on them. During his recruitment, they noted his sword skills and how good with a blaster he was.

See? Simple edits and changes, but nothing changed. It helps complete thoughts and not make it one giant sentence.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sat Sep 30, 2017 11:47 am

While I showed you how exactly not to do run ones it as an example, please continue the process. You still have a bit of work to go on it.
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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Sun Oct 01, 2017 12:03 am

zerowing21 wrote:While I showed you how exactly not to do run ones it as an example, please continue the process. You still have a bit of work to go on it.
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Oct 15, 2017 10:14 pm

I still see you haven't fixed the run on sentences in the history, can you please get to this.
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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Sun Oct 15, 2017 10:17 pm

zerowing21 wrote:I still see you haven't fixed the run on sentences in the history, can you please get to this.
fine , point the problems and ill see what I can do
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Oct 15, 2017 10:24 pm

Ty and its pretty much everything that's a run on from when I stopped the example.
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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Sun Oct 15, 2017 10:27 pm

zerowing21 wrote:Ty and its pretty much everything that's a run on from when I stopped the example.
like given space, periods and that's it
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Post  zerowing21 on Sun Oct 15, 2017 10:29 pm

Yes please.
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Post  fusionfallfan1995 on Sun Oct 15, 2017 10:31 pm

zerowing21 wrote:Yes please.
fair enough
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