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John BioCreed

Post  xXJohnFusionXx on Wed Dec 04, 2013 2:24 am

Age: 15

Ethnicity: Caucasian

Race Human

Allegiance: United Federation (private NetWork)

Origins: Humanoids (forgot what Origins Ment lol)

Powers: To Summon Ex KND Members to help
John BioCreed Is a Elite Member Of United Federation A Private NetWork Who Plans To Defeat Fuse While the Heros Play War The Real Fight Begins
John Biocreed Aka To his Friends Knuckles BioCreed
has Blue Hair Tall and Never Talked His Choice of Weapons Were guns and some times swords He is very Talented and he was trained by the best he worked with some heros like dexter as he was commanded to get info from them. John Soon Later Broke His Leg Trying to Escape a Fusion Attack On Downtown His Transport was shot down by a fusion And soon Later he was captured he was Rescued by a Girl She Never told Him Her Name But Yeah Thats John and some of his history Very Happy
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Re: John BioCreed

Post  zerowing21 on Wed Dec 04, 2013 2:28 am

He needs to be a bit more fleshed out than that. We have a form you need to follow with everything he needs. Also his power to summon ex KND is not a real power. His bio makes little sense due to it being one big run on sentence. Take your time to edit it and flesh him out. I would also refrain from trying to make him the big bad hero type. As for his alliance he would be placed in good, not in his network group.
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Re: John BioCreed

Post  zerowing21 on Wed Dec 04, 2013 2:31 am

http://rp.fusionmodhq.com/t7-advanced-character-creation-form-tutorial

I would also go to the required reading section to look at all the stuff there.
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Re: John BioCreed

Post  Kyra_Xyrespace on Wed Dec 04, 2013 6:40 pm

xXJohnFusionXx wrote:Allegiance: United Federation (private NetWork)
Good or bad would have sufficed.

Origins: Humanoids (forgot what Origins Ment lol)
Click here to read about Origins and to see what is available

Powers: To Summon Ex KND Members to help
Not a power.

John BioCreed Is a Elite Member Of United Federation A Private NetWork Who Plans To Defeat Fuse While the Heros Play War The Real Fight Begins
John Biocreed Aka To his Friends Knuckles BioCreed
has Blue Hair Tall and Never Talked His Choice of Weapons Were guns and some times swords He is very Talented and he was trained by the best he worked with some heros like dexter as he was commanded to get info from them. John Soon Later Broke His Leg Trying to Escape a Fusion Attack On Downtown His Transport was shot down by a fusion And soon Later he was captured he was Rescued by a Girl She Never told Him Her Name But Yeah Thats John and some of his history Very Happy
Please space out appearance, personality, and history, and please add in strengths, weaknesses, and the use of nanos

His personality from what I read is very generic and 2-D. Add in more traits, including vices since so far it's nothing but praise-worthy personality traits.

Also, please describe what United Federation is and does.

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