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Post  Kaiser on Mon Sep 28, 2015 4:15 pm

They don't have to be poems, I just gave you the technical definition that described bards from a period that they were popular so you got the gist of what they were. Think of bards as pretty much musicians that are also poets. You can modernize him to write songs and sing them if you want; the important part really is that he recites something through musical form.

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Mon Sep 28, 2015 7:03 pm

Kaiser wrote:They don't have to be poems, I just gave you the technical definition that described bards from a period that they were popular so you got the gist of what they were. Think of bards as pretty much musicians that are also poets. You can modernize him to write songs and sing them if you want; the important part really is that he recites something through musical form.

Oh, okay then. I can probably do Songs. Maybe the occasional poem or two. Thanks! Anything else?
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Post  youngjusticeforever on Wed Sep 30, 2015 4:25 am

Anything else I need to change/alter on Zeytran, or is he pretty much good to go?
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Post  Kaiser on Wed Sep 30, 2015 8:12 pm

Kind of just a nitpick, but it'd appreciated if you change the light yellow text for Rage, kind of hurts my eyes tbh.

Other than that, I'll give it an approval.

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Post  Blueyedemoness on Wed Sep 30, 2015 8:14 pm

I'm glad you had the patience to push this far for your character, YJF and I can safely say your character is ready to go with one more approval! (not counting my own in this post)

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Wed Sep 30, 2015 9:40 pm

Kaiser wrote:Kind of just a nitpick, but it'd appreciated if you change the light yellow text for Rage, kind of hurts my eyes tbh.

Other than that, I'll give it an approval.

I think I can change the text for Rage....there!

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Wed Sep 30, 2015 9:42 pm

Blueyedemoness wrote:I'm glad you had the patience to push this far for your character, YJF and I can safely say your character is ready to go with one more approval! (not counting my own in this post)

I Approve

Don't thank me just yet, I still need to figure...wait, nevermind! I thought this was Cynthia for a second...thanks! So, am I good to go? Or, do I need one more approval?


Mission Status: Blueyedemoness and Kaiser have approved Zeytran. Cancel Operation: Cynthia, I repeat! Cancel, Operation: Cynthia! Good job home-base! Over and out...waait, we have cookies? YAY!

So...two or three approves?
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Post  Kaiser on Wed Sep 30, 2015 10:00 pm

You need three approvals, so another mod has to approve him as well. I wish you luck Smile

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Wed Sep 30, 2015 10:04 pm

Kaiser wrote:You need three approvals, so another mod has to approve him as well. I wish you luck Smile

Thanks! Also, check out Cynthia, I redid her. She was gonna be a substitute for Zey till he got finished. Now she's an awesome assassin who's got daddy issues and a slight penchant for being a man-hating jerk.....wait....uhm...
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Post  zerowing21 on Thu Oct 01, 2015 11:35 am

Allegiance can't be demongo. It has to be good guys, bad guys or neutral.
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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 2:51 pm

zerowing21 wrote:Allegiance can't be demongo. It has to be good guys, bad guys or neutral.

Isn't that some-what nit-picky? I've already changed a lot when I didn't want to...and Kaiser and Blue didn't seem to care....
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Post  Kyra_Xyrespace on Thu Oct 01, 2015 3:28 pm

youngjusticeforever wrote:Isn't that some-what nit-picky? I've already changed a lot when I didn't want to...and Kaiser and Blue didn't seem to care....

No, it is not nit-picky because it was in the OC form, if you've forgotten.


OC Form wrote:Allegiance: Are you fighting for the Good Guys? The Villains? Or are you a Neutral?

So, place whether he is neutral or evil because he's obviously not fighting on the heroes side.

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 3:33 pm

Kyra_Xyrespace wrote:
youngjusticeforever wrote:Isn't that some-what nit-picky? I've already changed a lot when I didn't want to...and Kaiser and Blue didn't seem to care....

No, it is not nit-picky because it was in the OC form, if you've forgotten.


OC Form wrote:Allegiance: Are you fighting for the Good Guys? The Villains? Or are you a Neutral?

So, place whether he is neutral or evil because he's obviously not fighting on the heroes side.

It seems nit-picky to me, but whatever, and no. I didn't forget.

I'd like to say he's more chaotic neutral, at the moment he's neutral but he might go full blown evil later. Is Chaotic Neutral an option?
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Post  Kyra_Xyrespace on Thu Oct 01, 2015 3:42 pm

That'll be fine.

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 3:57 pm

This good for approval now, Zero and Kyra?
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Post  zerowing21 on Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:03 pm

What is it about his naive nature that make it a weakness, same with his ADHD. You might see it as nitpicking, but I would like more details.
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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:08 pm

zerowing21 wrote:What is it about his naive nature that make it a weakness, same with his ADHD. You might see it as nitpicking, but I would like more details.

ADHD, he can't sit still and that isn't good.
Naive Nature, well, he's...for lack of a better word, immature. He really doesn't grasp the concept of being manipulated, and he is like I said, optimistic, perhaps too optimistic. This can lead him into trouble. I myself would count those as weaknesses, or bad things.
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Post  Kyra_Xyrespace on Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:31 pm

youngjusticeforever wrote:ADHD, he can't sit still and that isn't good.
Naive Nature, well, he's...for lack of a better word, immature. He really doesn't grasp the concept of being manipulated, and he is like I said, optimistic, perhaps too optimistic. This can lead him into trouble. I myself would count those as weaknesses, or bad things.

Explain those in his weaknesses. They are weaknesses, but they need to be described in the section.

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:34 pm

Kyra_Xyrespace wrote:
youngjusticeforever wrote:ADHD, he can't sit still and that isn't good.
Naive Nature, well, he's...for lack of a better word, immature. He really doesn't grasp the concept of being manipulated, and he is like I said, optimistic, perhaps too optimistic. This can lead him into trouble. I myself would count those as weaknesses, or bad things.

Explain those in his weaknesses. They are weaknesses, but they need to be described in the section.

Anything else or can this be approved?
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Post  zerowing21 on Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:42 pm

*stamps tentative approval on forehead*
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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:48 pm

zerowing21 wrote:*stamps tentative approval on forehead*

*does the happy dance* doo dee dee I win I win, da da doo doo doooooo BAM *dances away*

off Zeytran goes, to RPing and beyond!

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Post  zerowing21 on Thu Oct 01, 2015 5:01 pm

There you go.
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Post  youngjusticeforever on Thu Oct 01, 2015 5:02 pm

zerowing21 wrote:There you go.


Thank you! I look forward to RPing with you, Zero. And you Kyra. And you Kaiser. And you Blue, especially you, Blue.
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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 9:36 pm

bumping this up per Professor Utonium
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 9:55 pm

I hope you read over the DID Rules I linked to you in your Bootcamp.

The history needs to explain how Zeytran's mind triggered Nartyez's existence in Zeytran's mind.

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