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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 4:30 am

Pain snorts. "gender neutral term? Wow. Just....wow" He drawls. "Shut up, Pain!" Zeytran growls, punching himself in the stomach.
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 12:08 pm

(( Why would Zeytran hurt himself? ))

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 7:05 pm

((He's not. The personalities have a joint body, but they can redirect blows to each other, but only through the body. So while Zeytran was hitting Pain, Joy, Hate and Rage couldn't feel it. Only Zeytran and Pain could. Whoever is in control and the target can only feel it))
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 7:39 pm

(( That seems a little complicated. Still, why would Zeytran hit himself if he'd feel the pain.

My first rework suggestion is to add that they all feel it, since they are all Zeytran. They're just personalities and in his head. ))

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 7:45 pm

((Because he loathes Pain more than he loathes the pain. All of them have rivals, except for Joy. Pain and Zeytran, Hate and Rage. Those are the rivals, Joy tends to get along with everyone, but Pain and Hate dislike Joy, or hate Joy in Pain's case. Pain however is a sociopath, so eh.

Exactly. They are just in his head. When one Personality takes control of the body, they can put direct harm on another, it's much more potent than a Mental battle as the other can't truly fight back in the same manner. But say, Joy and Hate wouldn't feel it nor would Rage because they are being submissive, they have utterly no control over the body. Pain's the target though, meaning he can be harmed.))
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:04 pm

(( Again, seems a lot complicated than it should be.

I'm beginning to think Zeytran would work better without the different personalities. It's just baggage at this point. ))

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:07 pm

((He could perhaps, but it's pretty much too late for that. And I'd need to seriously revamp his personality to fulfill my RP needs.))
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:12 pm

(( Not too late for that at all. We're here in the Bootcamp for a reason. And I seriously think that the multiple personalities aspect of Zeytran is hurting you more than its helping you.

Plus, he doesn't follow the basic rules of Characters with Dissociative Identity Disorder. If you really want to continue using the multiple personalities aspect of the character, I'd highly suggest to rework it based on our rules. ))

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:25 pm

((I could probably alter it to fit the DID rules. I'll probably have to scrap Rage and Hate, even Joy maybe. That's probably a major reason it got out of hand, too many different aspects. I'm thinking of naming Pain Nartyez, which is Zeytran backwards, as that would strongly symbolize the relationship between Pain and Zeytran. Polar Opposites. Pain is cruel and sadistic and an utter sociopath, while Zeytran is far more kind, despite being sarcastic and occasionally temperamental.

Where would I post the new thing? Alter his profile?))
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:29 pm

(( Edit the prexisting thread you have for Zeytran. Edit the title of the thread to say [Reapproval Needed] ))

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:48 pm

It's done.
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:59 pm

(( You might want to make a post on the thread as well to bump it and make it relevant again. ))

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Post  youngjusticeforever on Tue Jan 05, 2016 9:01 pm

Can't, it'd be double posting.
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Post  Professor Utonium on Tue Jan 05, 2016 9:27 pm

(( We'll let it slide in this case. ))

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